theinfluence（influence的形容词形式）

　　the influence（influence的形容词形式）
　　家好，我是来自加拿大的雅思老师Mac。今天，我们来看看6月5号的雅思大作文真题。
　　上题：
　　Family has a great influence on children’s development, but the influence from outside of home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree?
　　题目分析：
　　Type:Opinion (disagree)
　　Body 1: Outside influence play a significant role in shaping who we are
　　Body 2: Early childhood socialization, specifically the first three to five years of life
　　Opinion essayscan be tackled in 2 ways:
　　The first method is to simplyagree or disagreeand write aboutwhyyou agree or disagree. This means your essay could focus entirely on one side of the argument, but in doing so, you will need to showwhyyour argument is stronger than the other side (meaning you will still refer at some point to the other side).
　　The other method is to‘treat’ it like a discussion essay, whereby inbody 1 you discuss one of the arguments(the side you disagree with or the side that is less ‘powerful’ in your essay), andin body 2, the argument that you most favor or agree with.
　　In this essay, I am usingthe second method.
　　- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗读 -
　　-- Essay Analysis 范文解析 --
　　-- (1) Introduction --
　　Items to note about this introduction:
　　1) I understand the statement is an opinion (not a fact), and so my paraphrasing of the opinion is done in order to fit my opinion and my structure of the essay. This means I haveparaphrased the statement to suit my opinion,rather than the opinion in the statement. Conversely, I could have started with ＂There are those who think...; however, I believe...＂
　　2) Consequently, Ichange the order of the 2 aspects of the opinion, with ‘external’ first and ‘family’second, since I believe ‘family’ has agreater impact.
　　3) Normally, we use the phrase ＂in my opinion＂, but here, I use the phrase＂it seems clear that＂.This phrase clearly demonstrates that my opinion is being given.I will be sure, however, to use the phrase ＂I believe＂ or ＂I think＂ or ＂in my opinion＂in the conclusion.
　　4) I am not going to worry about paraphrasing ‘family’, as there simply is no better word to use.
　　5) I use ‘the family’ instead of just saying ‘family’, as I amturning the noun into a concept.
　　Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question:
　　a great influence on =a significant role in
　　children’s development =a child’s growth
　　influence from outside of the home =external influences
　　a bigger part =an even greater effect on
　　Standard Phrase for the ＂Opinion＂ type of essay:
　　There is no doubt that
　　; however, it seems clear that
　　Words showing Cohesion (C&C):
　　; however,
　　-- (2) Body 1 --
　　Aspects that must be referred to:
　　the influence from outside of home
　　Standard IELTS essay phrase:
　　One of the most ... is that
　　Vocabulary and Collocations:
　　powerful influences on 重大影响
　　a memorable experience 难忘的经历
　　traumatic 不愉快的；痛苦的
　　entailed 需要；牵涉到
　　setting 环境
　　cannot be understated 不容小视；不能低估
　　life-changing 改变人生的
　　Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)
　　, without doubt,
　　, for most,
　　, and for many,
　　, as
　　their
　　without
　　From that point onwards,
　　these
　　-- (3) Body 2 --
　　Aspects that must be referred to:
　　family influence
　　Standard IELTS essay phrase:
　　Despite this..., the most ... is
　　Vocabulary and Collocations:
　　formidable 艰巨的；令人生畏的
　　early childhood experience 幼年经历
　　mentality 心智；思想状态
　　socialization 适应社会的过程；社会化
　　fundamental 根本的；基础的
　　overarching impact (on) 非常重要的影响
　　leaves a stamp (mark/imprint) (on) 留下烙印
　　cannot be overridden 不会被覆盖/超越/重写
　　supreme power 重大影响
　　incontrovertible 无可争辩的；不容置疑的
　　Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)
　　Despite this
　　the most
　　their
　　This
　　, if not for
　　, and shows that
　　, especially
　　In essence,
　　That
　　, hence,
　　-- (4) Conclusion --
　　Standard IELTS essay phrase:
　　In conclusion
　　I believe
　　Vocabulary and Collocations:
　　an extremely powerful influence on 极其重要的影响
　　there is little doubt that 毫无疑问
　　indelible 不可磨灭的；无法消除的
　　Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C)
　　though..., (...) there is…